Working at McDonald's
WORKING AT MCDONALD’S
Working at McDonald’s an ideal part time job for students. Think about it, you don’t have much of a problem with your classes. They can’t give you a flexible schedule, so it does interfere with studying or you free time. Additionally, you earn some money; do the math, $6.75 per hour for 20 hours amounts to $135 per week. It can help you pay for rent, food, books, or utilities. You can use it for anything you want. At the same time you get working experience, this is very important for the future. When you finish school, you would have already been working. This means that you would have the experience of working with other people and communicating with them. This gives you an advantage over other students. In conclusion, Working for McDonald’s is a good idea for students.
SOL
posted by SOL @ 7:07 PM
1 Comments:
You have a good direct style of writing. You use good verbs and make your ideas clear with good examples. However, you also have several run-on sentences. For example, this is a run-on sentence: "Think about it, you don’t have much of a problem with your classes. " "Think about it" is a complete idea, and so is "you don’t have much of a problem with your classes." You could use a semi-colon or period between these two independent clauses.
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